pouvez vous me dire si ma lettre de motivation et bien et si il y a des faute je suis noté (3éme) Dear sir or Madam
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pouvez vous me dire si ma lettre de motivation et bien et si il y a des faute je suis noté (3éme) Dear sir or Madam i am writing to apply for the job of pastry which you advertised recently in the newspaper i am 15 years old and a student at voltaire junior high school. i live 5 minute of pastry . i m interested in this job because i love cakes and i do well cakes i have already worked for 5 years in a bakery pastry in the united states i have heard good things about your pastry i like being in contact with the customers i am kind generous friendly and smily . i can work after school hours and at week ends .i'm ready to work very hard i would be brilliant to for the job thank you for your time and attention sincerly
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1. Réponse Manonguilty
Dear sir or Madam, I'm writing to apply for the job of pastry which you advertised recently in the newspaper. I'm 15 years student at Voltaire junior high school. I live 5 minutes of pastry. I'm interested by this job because, I love cakes and I do well cakes. I have already worked for 5 years in a bakery pastry in the United States. I've heard good things about your pastry. I like being in contact with the customers and I'm kind, generous, friendly and smily. I can work after school and during the weekend. I'm ready to work very hard. I would be brilliant for the job. Thank you for your time and attention,
Sincerly your, -
2. Réponse nonoduchablais
Si tu es en 3è, ça veut dire que t es au collège donc ce n'est pas High School mais Grammar school.I have already worked 5 years (pas le FOR)
With customers (supprime le THE)
I'm reading (Il faut rajouter le ING)
I would be brillant to the job (pas le FOR)
Sincerely
Sinon, c'est pas mal ^^